I have created a short film and would love for your feedback! :)

[Rhys]

Hi! Sorry I'm not a senior, but this will be the only post I make

I have recently made a 10 minute film for school and would love if I could have your feedback. My target audience involves those aged 50 and over, but unfortunately I do not know many people that age

My intention with this film is to explore how career obsession can lead SOME people to lose touch with themselves, their family and their environment. In this case, the main character was once a famous actor, but cannot let go of his past glory

The link for the film is here:

If you could please watch my film, and reply with any feedback, I would be extremely appreciative.
Thank you!

 

[Pete]

Having a video production background I thought I would watch your video, however at my age now I could not clearly make the dialogue.
So one suggestion might be if your target audience is an older one you might want to have subtitles.

 

[hypochondriac]

Aussie film maker?

 

[toffee]

I found it had no depth to it - but keep trying !!

 

[treeguy64]

Boring, beyond belief. By the third cup of coffee shot, I was gone. Bad editing, shots jump, quickly, tough on the eyes. The film/video, itself, was nice and clear. Kudos, for that. Keep working on your ideas. Something good may come from them, eventually

 

[Sunny]

I can't get to your video. When I click on the guy drinking coffee, I get Seinfeld bloopers and a SNL segment.

 

[treeguy64]

I can't get to your video. When I click on the guy drinking coffee, I get Seinfeld bloopers and a SNL segment.

You have to long click on the video frame. If you short click, you do get the Seinfeld stuff.

 

[Uptosnuff]

I would agree it was a bit boring, but I did like the ending. You don't really know which one he is calling, which path he will take. You want him to call his daughter, but you're just not sure.

You got your point across without the main actor saying anything. Interesting technique there.

 

[jujube]

I sort of liked the coffee being made over and over. It got the point across of time passing and nothing changing. And as Uptosnuff said, the ending leaves you hanging and allows you to decide what happens.